Writers Memo about my Literacy Narrative

The first draft of my literacy narrative was a reflection of my thoughts, feelings, and memories of my life growing up in a family of divorced parents. It was a little less formal and I didn't notice very many of the grammar mistakes that I made. I also hadn't read the essay out loud so as it had a flow in my head, that didn't quite come through to the reader. This first draft was peer editied by two people in class. It was nice to have their perspectives on my paper and it was pointed out to me certain sentences that didn't really make sense or didn't flow. Once I had those pointed out, it was easier to see the direction my paper needed to go. I was told that the story seemed rushed and that if it was longer, it would help get my point across. Both of the readers also wanted me to elaborate on parts in order to make the story flow a little easier.

On the second draft that I turned in, I had eleminated some of the sentences that didn't need to be there and I elaborated on my story a little bit more. Like when I talked about moving around a lot as a child, the peer reviewers suggested I explain why that happened so I took that approach on my second draft. The biggest errors I had returned to me from the second draft would be grammar errors. It was also pointed out to me that I used a fact that I would have to cite if used. I got the statistic from a random web page so I now know that I can't use a statistic like that for my papers.

On my final draft, I believe all I have left to do is really look at all of my grammar errors and make appropriate changes to correct them. There are a few sentences that need to be structured a little differently and I will make those changes as well.